Thursday, September 1, 2011

Back to them

I started a group of grape acrylic paintings way back in March, and they have been languishing in my studio ever since. Well, I'm back at them, and this is one of the first that is on the way to completion. It's about 90% done but needs some more refining. I wanted to post it, however, to get some feedback from my readers. Look at it with cold, hard eyes and proffer your opinion or suggestions. A million and one thanks in advance! SECOND DAY - Some good advice everybody - THANKS - here's more work that I did today (the top photo).
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16 comments:

  1. BillSeptember 1, 2011 at 3:30 PM

    Hi David,
    In my humble opinion, I would like to see the bunch on the left closer, or larger. I think the refinements in the grapes closer to the viewer would add much interest.
    Bill

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  2. UnknownSeptember 1, 2011 at 9:39 PM

    Looks perfect to me.

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  3. AnonymousSeptember 1, 2011 at 10:22 PM

    It has all the elements and principles of good design. It has good color harmony with an unequal balance of darks, middle and light values. It has good unity and balance too. However, I do agree with David that the bunch on the left needs to be a little larger to create more perspective. Nice painting.
    Jean

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  4. DianneSeptember 1, 2011 at 10:32 PM

    It's amazing how you got the sunlight coming through the grapes. The ones on the right sort of meld in the "dazzle" but it seems they might need to be softened or blurred a bit, the way the sun's glare can make edges indistinct. Or am I on the wrong track?

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  5. Autumn LeavesSeptember 2, 2011 at 4:12 AM

    Absolute super palette, David. I love the sense of translucence in the grapes from the light source. I can't criticize this much, but I do think the light is a tad too glaring (it almost hurts my eyes on the monitor) but that could just be me and having tired old eyes this a.m.

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  6. Cynthia SchelzigSeptember 2, 2011 at 9:36 AM

    Wonderful greens and I love the grapes but I would add a touch more red/orange to the bunch that already has a hint of reds in it as well as toss a splash or two of red/orange into the background as when there is that much light as you show here it makes me long for warmer areas near the sun drenched grapes in places....as well as soften some of the grapes edges in the periphery.

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  7. Barbara MuirSeptember 2, 2011 at 12:06 PM

    David,

    My cold, hard eyes are enchanted. Loved the waves too.

    Happy September from
    Toronto,

    Barbara

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  8. David LobenbergSeptember 2, 2011 at 10:35 PM

    Bill, Yep, those foreground grapes need more refining. Thanks.

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  9. David LobenbergSeptember 2, 2011 at 10:36 PM

    Dharmesh, Thanks for weighing in on this. I appreciate it.

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  10. David LobenbergSeptember 2, 2011 at 10:37 PM

    Watercolorist (Jean), Thanks. The foreground grapes are going to grow in size.

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  11. David LobenbergSeptember 2, 2011 at 10:40 PM

    Dianne, You are definitely NOT on the wrong track. I'll work on the edges. Thanks.

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  12. David LobenbergSeptember 2, 2011 at 10:41 PM

    Autumn, I don't think its your "old" eyes. I may soften the glare a bit.

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  13. David LobenbergSeptember 2, 2011 at 10:42 PM

    Cynthia, Yep, more warmth sprinkled about. Thanks.

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  14. David LobenbergSeptember 2, 2011 at 10:43 PM

    Barbara, Thanks, I love the waves too, but these grapes are a challenge. Stay tuned to see the struggle. Guess no pain, no gain.

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  15. Meera RaoSeptember 3, 2011 at 6:44 AM

    Juicy gorgeous grapes !! I like the transformation but I do miss some of the blue green leaves you had in the first painting and some of the light on the grapes that made it look beautiful translucent...

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  16. David LobenbergSeptember 4, 2011 at 10:45 PM

    Meera, still struggling with this painting!

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